tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5090618648548883949.post2692199786701374412..comments2023-10-20T20:18:24.642+08:00Comments on budsy's juices: KiasuParents' Young Writers Contest 2012 : Topic - 2013 & Me (DD2's Contest Entry)budsy's juiceshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11424595293437585997noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5090618648548883949.post-69396146426786703992013-04-08T15:53:04.766+08:002013-04-08T15:53:04.766+08:00Hi Sara! DD2 says she misses you...
Oh yeah, she ...Hi Sara! DD2 says she misses you...<br /><br />Oh yeah, she asks if you can elaborate on the anecdotes and more on the showing instead of telling part? She says she learnt a lot from you guys during Dreamcatcher with regards to "show" thru writing... but will love to learn more (examples). <br /><br />Thanks in advance.budsy's juiceshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11424595293437585997noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5090618648548883949.post-20798769434856722542013-04-07T16:15:42.546+08:002013-04-07T16:15:42.546+08:00Hello!
Just would like to say that this is a good ...Hello!<br />Just would like to say that this is a good piece of writing, bursting with energy and individual style. I do like it a lot and I can relate to it. So well done DD2!<br />Just some pointers I might consider looking at would be, try to show instead of just telling. Perhaps, give the essay a little more colour with anecdotes. And since it's about the new year, perhaps DD2 can also consider the things she may look forward to other than just academically and school. <br /><br />Wish you all the best DD2!<br /><br />SaraAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com